IELTS Writing Task 2: bringing up
Some people say success in a person’s life as an adult is the result of the way he was brought up by his parents. Do you agree or disagree?
bringing up = fostering children
It is said that success in mature life is the outcome of fostering a child by their parents. I completely disagree with this statement. To become successful in life, talent, persistence and hard work are important, definitely not the facilities offered by parents at a young age.
First of all, achievement is impossible without understanding the task deeply and talent helps in this regard. Mark Zuckerberg, the current owner of Facebook, is a good example of this. Before him, many people had had the idea about such social media platform, but Mark has launched it for the world. Though his parents wanted to get him involved in their family business, Mark was rather interested in self-development and running the project he really admired. So, his parents’ role was very limited in that case.
Secondly, without hard work and persistence in achieving aims, it is difficult to reach success. For example, Bill Gates was daily working very hard to build Microsoft, and only after several years of relentless work, he became a successful entrepreneur. In his childhood, he had not received much help from his parents, but he got early age success.
In conclusion, ability and great effort are the results of a person’s success. In my opinion, parents are an important part of human life and their guidance is necessary for the wellbeing of their children but accomplishment does not solely depend on it. Early age facilities have a little effect regarding the achievements of a winner. Hunger for success always leads a man to his victory.
(255 words, band 8)
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